Writing meme

[aurora_novarum]

Ooh, writing meme! I can never resist these...to do or to visit at other people's.

Comment with a story I've written, and I will tell you something I knew, learned, or wondered about while writing it that didn't make it onto the page.

Gakked from kalquessa.

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Comments

[aurora-novarum.livejournal.com]

Oooh, Revelation and Damnation...

As she dressed in clean garb–she wondered what would happen when she went to the infirmary? Would Janet recognize what–no, not Janet. Never again would it be Janet. She closed her eyes to that remembered pain. Would Warner or one of the others sense she change she now felt beat within her? The damnation she exuded despite all the assurances to the contrary? How would...

That ellipses is where I actually had a new revelation while writing the draft.

The way the fic is set up, I figured Fifth would go through multiple versions of the scenario Replicarter showed Sam in Gemini. And at first I was going to have it be more like "Tin Men", the infirmary would show her as the other, even as she still felt like Sam and she'd see her differences with Fifth and SG-1 that way in how they reacted to her not being Sam and thus rejected.

But it wasn't Janet and it seemed a bit awkward and retreading the Tin Men ground, so instead this "version" of Fifth's training had a delay before the base attack of Replicators. It conveyed the same message but in a more dramatic way.

(I still wish I had taken one or more turns with a revision pen to this...I'm not so practiced in writing this way.)

[sg-betty.livejournal.com]

I found it extremely chilling and dramatic just as is... I don't know what you could have done that would make it more horrifying!