Writing meme

[aurora_novarum]

Ooh, writing meme! I can never resist these...to do or to visit at other people's.

Comment with a story I've written, and I will tell you something I knew, learned, or wondered about while writing it that didn't make it onto the page.

Gakked from kalquessa.

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Comments

[thraesja.livejournal.com]

I usually write third person limited (altering) as well, generally also in past tense, though I've been messing with present more recently. And I have a stalled WiP that I may try rewriting in first person, which will, er, be a first for me.

You were definitely in Hammond's head at the beginning. It was in the middle that I wasn't quite sure what you were going for. Most of the time I got that you were in an objective/neutral POV, but a few things struck me as crossing the line into omniscient . E.g. "Sam arrived first, looking around lost and wondering if she shouldn't have gone to her lab instead" as opposed to "It was obvious Daniel was weighing the question heavily in his mind." To me, the first is in Sam's POV, whereas the second is either in someone other than Daniel's or in an objective one.

As I said before, I'm pretty heavily biased against omniscient, mostly because authors often (lazily, in my opinion) use it to tell what a character feels instead of showing it through action and dialogue (and boy, do I ever regret once trying to explain that thought to an author who always writes sloppy third person subjective omniscient). However, that's clearly not what you were or ever have been doing. I was momentarily distracted trying to figure it out, but got caught up in what was happening. I actually think the neutral perspective was a good way to go, I just found you sidestepped out of it occasionally. And that's entirely my own preference and opinion; yours and everyone else's may differ substantially.

I totally agree on Makepeace. Good character. Decent guy. An inappropriate view on what was best for Earth.